Emily path is so confusing i tried all different choices flirted as much but keep get check failures i have her corruption points at a high and love points were like 8/10 at episode two its not very clear on what you want the player to do
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He never said that,you're not getting the point of what he meant. Neither did I the grammar and over all english was shite lol. But what I'm getting from his rant is how you are molding the main character to sound like a little beta or loser. In retrospective he's kind of right make him relatable give him some more charm let him be an extension of yourself per se him whining about being a virgin and getting not girls does gets tiresome to some readers. Hope that helped
Ok, so i'll give some constructive criticism the start is just not that good. I'm not truly engaged in said story im sorry, its not the worst but the dialog feels forced no natural banter. On top of that the humor seems like you're trying to hard. Also could you stop the Dora explora like monolog a little? him breaking 4th wall just takes away even more from the feeling in the game. Easier ways to just explain the surrounding of your home was to do chores a few remarks on the area but acting like a literal host and looking at the camera is annoying and not funny or "quirky" other than that I see potential if you keep chipping away at the minor details I've pointed out the game would be OK.
Update: I judged to quickly after finishing chapter 2 and 3 I have to say it was enjoyable I still stand by my previous judgment of the first chapter though rocky start but got a lot better progressively suggest others to give the game a go
that's what I'm mad about public release there's still pay to see lewd scenes hence my anger towards this other than that it's a good game just not worth spending 10bucks on at the moment especially with less than 1 gig if content with that said I hope the best this dev has great potential with his writing
Corrupted Kingdoms (NSFW 18+) comments · Replied to dovabro in Corrupted Kingdoms (NSFW 18+) comments
I'll probably get so much hate for this. But i have to say it, patreon exclusive scenes are kind of bs! why should i have to pay for lewd scenes on a public release? I would understand if this is until further notice, when you finish the game a bit more. But if this a set in stone policy I really gotta be honest that's very greedy and I don't see that as being the reward for patreons if that's the defense. I think them playing the game early and getting polls for said scenes is more than enough privilege. Also its not like you are drawing this right? I assume its AI is that why you need more money ?With the bitching and complaining out the way I will say good game and I would recommend it just gotta have a few bucks on hand sadly
House of Shinobi v0.15 (Public Release) comments · Posted in House of Shinobi v0.15 (Public Release) comments
My opinion so far of this game an interesting plot similar to Entreum if I do say so myself. I assume you were inspired by said game? Anyway it's good game my only complaint and take it with grain of salt I've just started writing and learning the elements of characters dialog. But you need to show not tell with some scenes. For example, when Lara was acting strange in the kitchen we the viewers/readers already know this since from her blushing and stuttering in said dialog there's no need to have the MC have inner thoughts twice about said subject. With that said the writing is good I find it enjoyable! 9/10 so far keep it up my good sir
Just horrid character Erica is my highest complaint of this game its a good game if you actually gave the character some balls ive seen gay men that act feminine that have more balls than mc like wtf and dont get me started on erica what kind of shit is this she beats and robs me humiliated the man and the only way to have a impactful relationship is to not get revenge its not bad writing im sorry if it's coming as I'm saying that but there were a million ways I could've written revenge and forgiven her afterwards make her submissive but this pissed me off I need to be a good boy to not get ntr like wtf ok after my paragraph of pitching I give the game a 7/10 has lots of improvements especially mc he makes me feel disgusted to even call him a he