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I hope so. It looks like a fun game otherwise.

Unplayable. The overbearing mountain of unnecessary dialogue in the way of inner monologue makes this impossible to enjoy. I find it insulting that you don't trust the reader to assess the dialogue themselves. For example when a character emphasises a word or term in a sentence like Helena's "Not through crude punishment, but through... fine-tuning." we don't need you to follow with the inner monologue "'Fine-tuning.' Sounds like..." just let the dialogue speak for itself and trust your audience to think that. Or when you go from meeting Helena to Laura we don't need a full 19 lines of inner monologue assessing the character. We know she's distinctly different, and we can make our own assessment of what type of person she is based on the attire, the body, the facial expressions etc. all 19 lines I had to click through are spontaneous thoughts that take a fraction of a second for the reader to conclude on their own.

Thanks for the 50% discount this week given the changes to how the game is published.

I think you're in the same place as me: you don't want your work to just be a piece of degenerate media thats popular with degenerates as fuel for their degeneracy... but you also have to accept that men overwhelmingly respond poorly to smut novels, and we have to develop something between those mediums.

As a pure passion project, this can do great, and you can be very happy with the result, but if you want any level of results from your work (like viewership, growing a brand, reputation and money) then this is not the path if you are marketing the storywriting to men. Women read smut novels all day every day in public, with the families around, no one bats an eye, but men are visual creatures, and as someone who has read a couple dozen smut novels and novellas (i.e. a man that is far more likely to be interested in this becoming a book when compared to the vast majority of men), I don't see this having success purely based on the inability to market it. It's like trying to advertise car exhaust mufflers to women, it just isn't going to happen no matter how great the deal is. You need to keep your market avatar in mind with everything you do. I have been trying to figure out where the middle ground is between smut novel (what men don't respond to) and AVN (what men respond to but is highly taboo) as a new genre to launch something into as a writer myself, and after about 9 months I've still not figured that out...

Still waiting for this irl

Ep.8 was very entertaining - I was hooked on playing it, however it did not feel like the story progressed almost at all. At this pace we'll need 100 episodes to complete the story and the project is bound to shut down before that. Please make the next episode faster pace otherwise I worry that you risk many fans losing interest after waiting ~1.5 years for 2 episodes with barely any story progression.