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Phulegart

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Ok.  The AVN looked interesting, like many others here looked interesting.  I figured I'd give it a shot.  And... I barely got past the prologue before feeling like I had to just... put it aside.  I realize that this isn't "fair"... so I am going to try again.  But the storytelling is just off... wrong.

I'm not talking about the story idea, AI constructs in human-like bodies that are essentially a new/better form of human wanting to create a revolution.  I'm talking about the execution of that concept.  Alright.  The MC was left alone by his parents, and is bullied, so he keeps to himself.  Even his oldest friend, isn't really a friend.  Sure, she is pleasant, but when he reaches out to her for inclusion, all she can do is fob him off on other people *SHE* doesn't want to be friends with.  When her friends arbitrarily decide not to include him, she doesn't stand up for him.  His parents buy him an AIGirl out of guilt because they aren't there for him, and now he has to deal with bullying in his own home.  He doesn't even have the option to hold this AIGirl responsible for the way she acts, and the ONLY option is to have a good time watching a movie with her, while she teases him just to make him uncomfortable.  The MC is one who apparently enjoys his own company, rather than face a continued stream of rejection... and he doesn't even have that anymore to retreat to.  And for us, to enjoy any of the adult content, we have to make choices that are completely OUT of character, for the character we are given to play.

He meets and "saves" another AIGirl who gets injected in his life, who appears to be the polar opposite of the one purchased for him.  When she expresses desires for the MC, our "legitimate" first AIGirl only bullies the MC further... not out of actual jealousy, but out of a sense of control.

He meets the rule-breaker in class, talks out of class, is told that she is interested in him playing drums with her band, and then tells him he needs to compete with someone else for the chance.  The character, as has been detailed up to this point, would simply reject himself rather than audition and face this new perceived humiliation.  Everything up to this point just says he would completely believe in a "Why bother trying, I should just play more games" attitude.

As an experiment, I progressed several weeks into the game, simply showering and going to class, going home, playing games and sleeping.  Not one AIGirl ever called/contacted him.  There was no concern.  After telling the maid what her duties were, that was it.  No random scenes involving meals when he got home, no random conversations asking about how he was doing, or why he just focused on school/games/sleep.  From the way the story played out, he wasn't supposed to take advantage of his maid without inspiring derision and the ire of the AIGirl he owned, but he most certainly couldn't take advantage of that one either.  A Damned of you will, Damned if you don't scenario.

Even the formation of the guild/club/team/syndicate to fight the VAI threat... our original AIGirl had no interest until she could be in charge of it, and even then the idea of her having any responsibilities as the one in charge turned her off.  In a broader sense, it was tragically comical how the MC was introduced to the threat of an AIGirl starting an AI Revolution, and the only solution was for him to have a *different* AIGirl be in charge of fighting this revolution... trading one bad master for another, so to speak.

I get it.  I was supposed to make different choices as the game progressed.  Those choices as presented did not feel organic or natural at all.  Sure, turn him into a dominating, lecherous person, and you get the NSFW content.  But that just feels like... having to ignore the story and MC's details just for sex scenes.

It is a shame that there does seem to be a lot of potential to this AVN, with how beautifully it is rendered with wonderful looking character designs, but it comes across like "I need to show tits to the player now because they have spent XX amount of time playing" rather than any valid reason for why the MC would see them.  Even peeping, or walking into a silent bathroom, or a door left open by accident would be better than "I need to write this AIGirl as insecure for this scene so I can render tits."

So, I'll try again.  I'll play the character for the scenes, and not the story... because at this point, with what the MC has faced this early on, I don't know why we aren't given the option to have the MC just throw himself from his own terrace.  I mean, I know that would just end the game (and there's no point to **that**), but as written, it feels like that option **should** be available.  Not because I want to kill the MC.. but because every time there is a possible reason for him to want to come out of his shell, the story as written slams him back into it.  I could get behind an MC who decides enough is enough, and he is going to become a Sex Slave Master.  But that isn't this MC.

Another commenter here put it well.  Our suspension of disbelief is stretched too thin... beyond the breaking point.  And for the record, with all those Patreons having their usernames immortalized on the shelf, you'd think that some (at least one) of them could have helped improved the spelling, grammar, and dialog issues.  It kind of comes across like the only thing that matters is money.

Progress the story.  The fairies (plural) get more attention.  One eventually hangs out in your room.

I understand that the goal is to get laid.. this is a Hentai fantasy after all.  So it is a matter of the main character putting up with whatever they must to accomplish this.  I also understand that you must try to write the characters as close as possible to how they are presented in their source materials as possible.

It would make more sense if the main character could "break" Asuka, possibly turning her into a dependant sub.  He has only known his stepsister for the duration of the story, thus he has only known her to be abusive and manipulative.  Nothing (even the tub scene) shows her to be redeemable.  Nothing has occurred to show he would ever have reason to care for her.  She only uses sex as a method of control as opposed to actual intimacy that might suggest the possibility of redemption.  This would be magnified by the fact that he knows she is a fictional character and only code that could be re-written to become a better "person".

There might also be a potential path available for change, if one looks to Jessica Rabbit.. to paraphrase, she isn't bad, she's just written that way.  But she would have to not only accept that the simulation is a lie, but that Everything she knows about herself is only fiction.. there was no father to leave her, no giant mechs to pilot, none of her previous experiences ever having happened.  This would essentially kill the personality known as Asuka Langley leaving her a blank slate with red hair and language skills.

Just my opinions.

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Too many bugged tasks.  You gain no money the first time you shoot drones for Rebecca regardless of the scene showing cash being handed over.  Also earning money with Rebecca can be started in the morning, and takes two time slots while earning in the afternoon only takes one.  Also you shoot drones indefinitely after the introductory session of having to only shoot 6... and yes I know you can just skip shooting any to still get paid.  Also if you earn another $400 after purchasing the dress and giving it to your "stepsister" the task resets forcing you to purchase and give it to her again.  Also if you go to class on Monday after getting the assignment and working on it, the task gets reset and you have to do it again.  Also, you get the task to go to the kitchen on Saturday morning on Saturday night.  Then, when you sleep on Monday night you get introduced to the Nexus and wake up on Sunday morning.

And the character of Asuka is written to be so abusive and deeply narcissistic, that I cannot accept how the main character would have any interest in freeing that artificial intelligence from the simulation.  All I want to do is get a weapon from Rebecca to put a bullet in Asuka's head.  There is no reasonable resolution to that level of narcissism, not without serious psychotherapy, pharmaceuticals, and shock therapy.  The idea that the main character is willing to put up with it just for the sake of freeing some AI code makes no sense. 

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