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This is really unique. I wouldn't have even thought about something from a kind of bystanders perspective. Maybe consider adding the back arrow or a link to restart(for some passages I couldn't go back).

It seems like we are playing as an ai/being that is hopping around and controls multiple things like siri, a car, a person? It is confusing, the perspective changes are abrupt.

 I think adding something to clarify what we are or if these are separate stories would help. I think adding pictures would benefit the story. Like looking at a person through the phone camera, seeing a person driving from one of those screens in a car, looking down at your hands. 

Nice! I think this is a great base. Right now there's a lot of stats but not a lot to do/ effect those stats. It make me want to know more. 

Very interesting!, I really liked the way everything was written.

Its unfortunate that the picture doesn't work.

I like how many different choices you can make. I feel like it abruptly starts. I also think that it would benefit from adding more description of the different locations.

This is really well written. There is a lot of text though. I think it would benefit from adding more art. 

I enjoyed playing your game, There are a few errors with the choice's having page numbers. Maybe consider adding some art and more places to explore.

I really like all the different text effects.  When the text appears slowly and when it blurs in it adds very nicely to the atmosphere. No text or restart appears on the closet door choice.

The theme and art are really good, I think I would've liked to see some more art though. 

I really liked this one.  There were some errors in the code and some of the text oddly formatted. Great job. 

Great game. I think that it needs a scroll bar and/ or a full screen button. I also like the scrolling text, it adds unique touch but gets repetitive when having to wait for it.