Decent animations, although sometimes inconsistent Art. When Zoe gives you a BJ in the gym she is sweaty in the first shot and dry in the second. Also, Raven & Zoe both talking like a podcast with a dick down their throats... makes no sense. Either cut in some handywork so they can talk, or limit their "talking" to "mmmmphf" "glllrk" and shit like that. As for Raven the boinking, inconsistency again, she eggs you on to fuck her ass, then towards the end begs to not get creampied for fear of pregnancy before she succumbs to her hornieness and just tells you you'll have to take responsibility. So, which hole are we actually in? Anal isn't a thing many girls offer on the first romp, especially if the caliber is rather large.
Also, you might want to reconsider the general scaffolding. As it is there is a lot of time wasting and just clicking "advance time, sleep, advance time" until the next event. UNLESS you have the whole game roughly planned out, you might want to switch to a Novel-Style, without the empty padding of an empty map where there is nothing to do.
As for planning out your game: I highly recommend doing that! If need be things can always be changed later, but having a rough outline of the when, where, who is helpful and a useful management tool to keep empty downtimes to a minimum.
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And on a personal note: When Raven bent over at her desk, my first idea was to drag her pants down and feast on the ample offering presented XD