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Hands down the best one of all the stories I have read so far. The obsession with elegance is the cherry on top of a great story. 

Hands down the best one of all the stories I have read so far. The obsession with elegance is the cherry on top of a great story. 

wow. I feel so bad the little pet rat is gonna be left on its own! Felt a connection with that little buddy. Love the story, good job.

Awesome story. I could feel the exhaustion the soldier felt. It was all very realistic. I'm not sure how the theme fits into the story but it was well done and enjoyable.

very original work. Think it could use a little refinement but it is an interesting story for sure.

very original work. Think it could use a little refinement but it is an interesting story for sure.

woah love this. Not many people wrote about the plague. I enjoyed your description of the body and the parasite.

I enjoyed the twist at the end. Well done.

Honestly read this and feel more confused at the end of the story than I was at the beginning. The concept of a hacker battle is cool but the way this was written I am thoroughly confused about what happened in the story, how its relevant to theme, and what was the point of the battle that took place. I would rework this hard and make things nuch clearer so the reader doesn't finish and think, "huh!" What did i just read.

First one I'm seeing about a ratman. It is very good. I enjoyed the fact that an accident led to a good outcome. Gives me bob ross "happy little accident" vibes. I need the mc's luck. I can roll 20 dice and get 19 1's.

that was a very different story than any of the other ones I read so far. I enjoyed it, but I am not entirely sure what actually happened lol. 

This is my favorite story so far. Excellently done from start to finish. Really captures the theme and was very entertaining. 

very well written. I enjoyed the level of sass displayed by your orcs. Was very entertaining. The only thing I would say is that some of the text in the middle became a bit overwhelming because of the lack of paragraph breaks. Otherwise excellent job!

I enjoyed this story a lot. I could really feel the panic your mc was met with initially after being shot. Great story.

enjoyed this story. Was very original and well written overall. Great job.

I really enjoyed your story the only thing I would say is that you accidently copied a whole section twice and am wondering if you will still make word count without the extra copy. 

wow the description of your characters is so clear. I could totally imagine this being a short video with minis. Good Job!

Honestly read this and feel more confused at the end of the story than I was at the beginning. The concept of a hacker battle is cool but the way this was written I am thoroughly confused about what happened in the story, how its relevant to theme, and what was the point of the battle that took place. I would rework this hard and make things nuch clearer so the reader doesn't finish and think, "huh!" What did i just read about.

I really enjoyed reading about Zifor6. I think conceptually this would be super cool to make into a narrative mission. The only advice I could give would be to be a bit more descriptive about the setting. Was a little difficult to envision what Zifor 6 actually looked like, but I think that's a personal preference. Overall great job! Can't wait to hear future tales from you.