I downloaded this expecting a quick wack and then no more. But your writing is incredible, from start to currently the finish. I was absolutely absorbed by this story, this experience even. The characters, the world, everything about it is incredibly well crafted. It has occupied my mind constantly since I started reading. Aside from a few places with improper grammar, or simple spelling mistakes it's very well done and was a pleasant surprise.
The art itself could use some work, some time after you've finished the story you should re-draw the beginning scenes and sprites as the janky look slowly disappears as you progress. However setting aside my personal grievances with the way things were drawn, which even that couldn't draw me away from your writing by the by, there was not a lot of complaining I can do. Every choice has its weight, exploring each path has its merit, and the bonds you form with each character has you cheering and weeping the whole time. Alice specifically is my favorite route, it's really hard for me to get invested in characters but she is just something else.
Very few, if any bugs or otherwise game ruining glitches (suppose it's hard to mess up a visual novel though, but some out there experience frequent crashes despite the low memory cost). There is a LOT of content here, I spent hours of my free time reading this across multiple days, any time I was free it was split between diablo 4 and reading this, honestly still blown away by its sheer length.
All in all, with a bit of refinement on the art front, and a bit more proofreading (I would definitely help out with that if you need, no charge), your story has been an absolute blast to read and experience. I sincerely look forward to what you put out next and anxiously await the next chapter of our hero's life.
P.S. Just my personal opinion but I think after this next major conflict you should try going a bit more in depth with the main character, something I feel is lacking just a smidge. Have them explore who they are, what they want to be, establish some preferences or something. I just want the main character to be a little more me, someone I can identify with, with the setup you have already I feel like something awful could happen to a certain specific set of friends, (I think you know the two I mean, especially with recent goings on. I know you have something planned, but think about my idea for after it's all over) and perhaps something happens that forces the main character to take a step back and think on who they truly are. My idea is perhaps is that the main character tries meditation or something of the sort again but this time, for an unexplained reason, slips into a trance like state where the entity we've recently become familiar with asks some questions that suddenly click with them. I dunno, just taking out of my ass lol, thanks for reading this far.