this is grammaticaly correct actually, at least it makes sense to me. might be a regional type of thing?
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Loved this one so much, I love how it plays into an anime/manga style with both its writing and presentation. Everything comes together to form a cohesive whole in the best way possible. I know you said you'd rather focus on your other vn for now but I really do hope you come back to this at some point!
I think my favorite part of this submission is the world-building; we're shown this little snippet of a huge world that leaves us craving for more. As for theming, it feels a bit on-the-nose, but the vn overall fits well enough.
I do hope this is expanded, as this feels a lot like it's in the middle of a much longer story. Exposition could be removed in favor of expanding the vn to a larger scale.
ooh nice!
shortening 15 days to 10 sounds like a good idea but considering their vacation is 2 weeks long I feel like maybe having filler days solely for progressing Robert's relationships could be a better solution? though, I have only just started so im not too certain what the premise of the rest of the game is