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This was super solid. Could use a pass over on the capitalization, but that's a seriously minimal mention all things considered. Art was actual peak

The good: - I personally like the writing, even if it isn't everyone's taste
-The character designs are very good, notably the MC. He's actually got character and isn't *insert generic brown hair brown eye self insert MC*
-Animations are pretty good.
-Mia exists.
-The font is easy to read! There's a surprising number of times this isn't the case in VNs, but thanks for the black outline my guy. I mean it.
-Story is interesting and I like the slower, more grounded pace.

The bad: - The bonus stickers. I've read through to the current update and didn't see a single one. Maybe a highlight or brief pointer on the first one so players have an idea on what they should be looking for?
-Typos. There are.... SO many typos. Mostly being brought up because I saw mention of a proofreader. Not sure what they were actually checking but it sure wasn't typos. Similarly, there's some minor grammar changes that could occur, but those were way less noticeable.

The ugly: - Not really a good or bad but the achievement popup needing to be clicked to continue kept throwing me off.

All this being said, I will be dropping some cashola in the Patreon, because I am invested.

I think I figured it out. If you don't full-screen the game, you can't see the full screen and you don't see the key in the top right, probably just got it by luck and finished the level.

tHE WORST PART ABOUT THIS INTRO WAS THE MC CUTTING HIS HAIR. gIVE ME AN OPTION TO KEEP HIS HAIR /HJ

I mean on that same line of thinking, it also takes less than a minute to join the spaces dedicated for updates if you're that concerned about it. Basically two clicks. Weird take to call it disrespectful if you can't put that much effort into looking for information imo

I'm ngl, I clicked the casino once, it said maybe later and I promptly pretty much forgot it existed. The coin requirement was just high enough to interrupt flow but not high enough I ever felt the need to gamble, considering the potential to lose and thus spend more time coin grinding. Maybe consider some sort of item or reward in the gamble hall, maybe that changes things later, rather than just "maybe make grind less, maybe make grind more." Would also give more of a purpose to the coins, rather than just to slow down the story. Just the ramblings of a random internet man, no need to take it as gold.

Pros ( As of Chapter 1 End )
-Very nice art, big fan of the style.
- Didn't notice any grammar issues, which is a nice plus in a VN.
- Called me out in approximately 30 seconds ( I enjoyed this, it really hit home.)
Cons (As of Chapter 1 End)

-Felt like the transition between rides could be smoother, as in some written in guidance or something.

- I think the coin amount per ticket could've been reduced. Digging 10 out for a couple of the rides really felt like it broke the flow of the story.
- One of the options at the end of the chapter made absolutely no sense, but that might just be my miniscule brain.

Honorable Mention-
Trashcan Frog.

TL;DR- unique art, decent writing, could use some TLC in places. I will watch this project with great interest.

9/10 Stabby Mike is amazing. He has my vote. Comedy is top notch.