Really hoping there's an update soon, game update or just one on patreon, this has been my favorite VN I've played and it'd suck for it to die.
ItchyShane
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This recent update was really great, the later half especially but that's just because I prefer combat scenes over sexual scenes. The amount of content that was in this update was great too especially with how recently the initial launch was. Only advice I could really give is just try to improve your grammar, maybe use Grammarly if possible?
This game has great potential and I honestly cant wait to see how it progresses, I'm quite excited for the next update. The quality of this games renders and writing really shows that you have great potential as an author seeing as this is your first game and you're already better than other more experienced authors.
This game needs work, while the story does seem interesting the writing and poor grammar make it too hard to follow and I often find myself not understanding the dialogue as well as feeling as if things are moving too fast. I'm in no way saying that this game is bad, just that it needs to be refined. I would also highly suggest not using "tho" and "boi" in your writing as it makes you seem unprofessional and lazy. Lastly I would suggest adding transitions between pictures to make the story flow more smoothly. Overall the story does seem interesting and I do plan on playing ep. 2 when it comes out and I dearly hope you don't take offence to any of my critiques as I'm just trying to provide constructive criticism.
The Mysterious Pervert side story is stuck in a loop for me, i talk to the guy in the district who directs me to the park, the guy in the park then directs me to the alley, and then the guy in the alley directs me back to the district. Also when the guy in the alley directs you back to the district it shows a picture of the guy in the district.
Haven't finished 0.1 yet but from what I've seen so far it seems like you've put a good amount of effort into this game and it really shows, all the scenes with great lighting and writing, proper English aside from some typos along with likeable characters. This game has lots of potential and I'm interested to see where it goes.