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Hello, Sandro. I read your work and I have enjoyed it so far. You have talent in writing and it's fairly well-written, but I have some nitpicks to point out and give you some suggestions to improve your writing.

First, it's the dialogue. You cannot write and merge the conversation between characters into a single paragraph. You're mixing and potentially confusing the readers in who-is-who is talking. You have to separate them individually. Like this:

"Hey, dude, you must be my new roommate!" he said with a warm voice. "I'm Jack, by the way." He held out his for me to shake.

I smiled and shook his hand. "Nice to meet you, Jack. I'm Sandro," I said, trying not to look too nervous.

Second, you are overusing the "I couldn't help but" a lot. In my opinion, it's getting pretty annoying.

Instead of: "It was a backhanded compliment, I knew, but I couldn't help but smile anyway."

Write this: "It was a backhanded compliment, I knew, but I smiled anyway."

Please, use less the "I couldn't help but" or drop it all together. I hope you will do better in the future.

Hello, I have trouble continuing the VN (1.9.0. PC ver.) after the confrontation scene when Ludus was held hostage for ransom. Not sure if you have fixed it on the 1.9.5 build.

Hey, does anyone know how to get the CG where Rou is lying on the couch only in his jockstrap?

Aw, so cute to read this VN! There were serious moments and heartwarming moments. And not one moment in the story felt plain and boring, it kept moving forward in a steady pace. You all did a great job in story telling. I'll look forward in the next update! 😃

Finally got to play it and I'm impressed! The MC is very committing with goals no matter the odds/obstacles, challenges that will hit him, and finding a true call for his purpose as a squire. The characters are well colorful in their own ways and their motives and cultures etc. Love it!

I'll look forward for the next update! Keep up the good work!!!

For those who want an Android version of the game.

I talked to the Devs on twitter about it and said the following: "Due to usage of unique UI and mechanics, adapting to Android is a whole new line of work. It's currently not on the schedule due to we are focusing on making the game itself."

https://twitter.com/IWave360/status/1645402102905073665

I enjoyed the first build. So much love and dedication was given to this project. I will look forward to the next build and... now I'm left hanging with a deranged cat clawing for money.

Keep up the good work, developers. 😀

Question for Radcanine: Why did you decided to use your fursona for the VN?

Just played the latest update and I'M SO ON EDGE!!! There is a lot going on and I'm craving for the next update (but take your time, of course). As a nautical-themed story this is the kind of story that I never asked for but I'm glad it did!

PS. Now, the only thing I have in mind is... How the hell do you lose a 20,000-ton icebreaker!?⛴

Great demo! I'm looking forward for next update! I really enjoyed it! 😃

I see. Thank you for your explanation. This does give me a better perspective view of the characters. Thank you. 😊

Hello. I played the latest update in Dallan's and Aiden's route. I really like what you have been working on, but can I ask why the romance is so rushed/too soon/fast? What do you have in store after they are now boyfriends and the main story has just begun?

Started reading the VN since the beginning of December. Finally finishing all chapters and OMG I AM FREAKING HOOKED with the story! It was a great reading experience and enjoyed every moment of it and I am looking forward the next update. Keep up the good work developers! 🤩

I'm glad that you hand-picked what specie you chose for the VN instead of the usual. It gives a refreshing look and can stand out differently from the rest. If I ever make a VN of my own, I'll pick the least popular species and make them hotter.

I will look forward to read/play the VN in the future once I finish with the other.

Am I the only one who downloads the latest update and then the next day there's a new update? As of writing this, yesterday, I downloaded the previous build and played a little until the following day they decided to upload a new build. Good thing I haven played too far to start all over.  😅

Hello. El demo es corto pero lograste a introducir a los personajes con sus personalidades muy a vivo y todo color. Tiene potencia y espero que mejores el trabajo/progreso de la VN, y tal como la ortografía del español que necesita cotejarlo bien como darle letra en mayúscula a los nombres como "theo". Pero de todos modos, keep up the good work. 😀👍

Hello. En verdad que fue excitante e intensa del horror-misterio del juego y de todo estoy muy impresionado con la trama en general. Tienen mucha potencia y espero por la siguiente actualization en el futuro y que sigan con el buen trabajo. 👍

PS- Veo que se inspiraron de Resident Evil o algo así porque encontré unas referencias como el complemento de la mansion que es gigante y lo del bingo lol. Y la sala principal con las escaleras parece a la de la Mansion de Spencer.

SPOILER!!!

Aw, I'm glad that Roux and Roo found each other~🥰

PS. If what Eric said was true, those kangaroo's glutes are to die for!!! Roux is one lucky man!😁

Very intriguing, cute, and funny VN to read! Even if the MC is not my type, he's so damned cute and horny!!!😁 lol. I'll look forward to the next update and keep up the good work!👍

I played Aiden's route and I'm very hooked with the story and the world setting of urban fantasy, but the romance felt too soon for a first chapter. Given the lusty and comedy theme of this visual novel's nature, I may give it a pass. But I know this VN has potencial and can do better with the romance without rushing it (depending how many chapters you're planning). I'll look forward on the next update and keep up with the good work. 😀

I wasn't sure at first but I gave it a go and I'm hooked with the very compelling story. I have so far played Ken ang Gabriel routes and I'll soon play Mark's route. Keep up the good work!😃

Hello. I played the latest demo and all I can say it's pretty decent and good. The characters are very distinguishable, fun and unique in their own way and quirks. I feel that maybe a few improvements on the art style and user interface could use some... and I have no idea what species Amy is.

But anyways keep up the good work and you will make a very good visual novel.😉

Hello, Dirk. I played an earlier version when you first released the game and I waited over a year know and finally saw some better progress and I'm impressed!!! The art-style is fantastic and colorful! And there's some lesser know species you have chosen like maned wolves, I hope I get to see more in the future. Keep up the good work! 😀

it's been a year since I first played the first demo and played the latest update and I AM blown away with this VN! While (linear so far) there isn't any choice decisions so far, or maybe assuming you all will save it for last or halfway in the story in later updates. But it's still a good story to read. Keep up the good work. 😀

Warning: Spoiler in Tai's Route.

Fan-theory.

When Adrian spends a night with Logan. I feared that he would get "infected" from Adrian's undiagnosed condition from Tai. So far as the story is coming to a close, it doesn't seem that would be the case. I know that the chances of getting infected with Tai's condition are very low in one in one-hundred.

I am hooked! I never thought there would be a nautical-themed story here, but here it is! It reminds me of movies like Ghost Ship, Deep Rising, and Triangle. I look forward to your next update and keep up the good work.😀

I been reading the comments. Sometimes I feel somewhat disappointed when the fanbase are wishing that their favorite no-route side character gets a route despite that the developers who worked so hard on writing their intended planned main characters routes. I don't blame them for that. I also very much like some of the side characters too and they have so far given a good spotlight like Jay the dragon. I also am surprised to see the developers giving exactly what the audience wants while not exactly what they wanted but it is still a nice treat. The "tales" concept in this VN works like charm and we get to explore more about the characters depending on what route you're in.

Hey, I think this is just me, but I think that Dr. Scion has a thing for "tentacles/vines" 😏😏😏😂😂😂

Una pequeña sugerencia, deberías hacer un sprite de Tiger sin camisa con los brazos sueltos para ver su gran cuerpo. Hehe~ Pienso que tener los brazos crusados "cubre" un poco la parte superior de su cuerpo.

What a charming and enchanting story until I find the King "sleeping" on the floor and holy sh*t the story got serious very quickly! It's really good and keep up the great work! 

Don't remind me of his eyes, they make me melt!!!🥵🥵🥵

Roux is the definition of a HUNK!!! You have no idea how distracted I was, staring at him while struggling to read the VN.🤤🤤🤤

PS: His name is pronounced as "ROO", the X is silent. It literally means red like Russell's.

You know the art-style is SO good when Daniel is staring at your very soul. I had a hard time reading this scene.😨

I just played the latest update and continued from Day 15 after Spencer's big reveal to Day 18 and... boy... it was one hell of a roller coaster! I enjoyed the great, wholesome, steamy, gossipy moments and loved it! I hope Adrian doesn't mess it up again. 😆

Hello~! I played the latest update on Maccon's route and I had a good laugh than ever! Maccon is such a sweet caring big brother~! The ghost scene was weird though... like... WTF?! lol. I have been following this VN since its first release and waited for a better update and saw mayor changes and improvements but kept its original charm of comedy and humor untouched. I'll look forward on the next update. 😀

Al fin logré terminar la reciente actualización! Me encantó los sprites! Es bueno al fin de ver a los personajes en vivo a todo color y ver mejoras en la novela visual. keep up the good work! 😁

hello! I played the demo and it was great! it's nice to see different species than the usual aside from the protagonist. I noticed you have made a lot reference from other visual novels and how in the in-story they are either movies or series. Keep up the good work! :D

looking forward to it~ :D I like the improved designs.

Hello~. I played the first demo when it first came out but it wasn't enough so I waited for the latest update and finally played the Build 3. I'm really hooked with the story, man! I like the characters, especially Oswald, Max and... Benji (I have mixed feelings with the raccoon, lol). And so the music, the backgrounds and that little animation on the main menu. You all keep up the good work! :D

Not everyone has a computer or laptop, I presume. Everyone are more likely to own a mobile phone than a PC.

Played the demo, it was great! I like the moving animation of the characters' sprite and the art-style. Amazing work and I'll look forward in the future.