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It's decent. It may or may not have been my fault for anticipating a stunning story, unfortunately I was simply left disappointed. Although I could see the author's efforts and their attempt to express the feelings and emotions they want to convey to the reader, the horrid grammar just makes me take it less seriously. Please, author, if possible, please hire a translator if you don't speak native English. I personally don't mind grammatical errors every now and then, but by how often this game does it is simply off putting. I like the theme of the game, I like the concept of it greatly and I commend the author for it. But I beg once again, please hire a translator if you do not speak English natively or isn't fluent. The apostrophes are overused and feels cluttered, the pauses are too often and it takes quite a while to understand the majority of the written sentences simply on how it is written by itself and the amount of grammatical errors it possesses. My goal is with this criticism of mine, I'll be able to somehow assist this unique game to become better. I found this game through Facebook, by the way. It is a Visual Novel game, so the grammar must be coherent and there should be little to no grammatical errors. But besides all that, I hope for future improvements KiaZhume!