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I've been min-maxing the grind feature to get items, but I actually have no idea what they are for. Can someone let me know?

LET'S GOOOOO!!!!!! 

it's finally here!!!

yes, there's a mixture of top and bottoming scenes. 

You have to first do tail service enough times to encounter Grimwald. After that, he will appear in the Flaming Flagon as a customer. Increase his bond enough and then go back to tail service. It should start his CG encounter. Hope this helps!

After the first bathhouse encounter, talk the Murry at the market. Talk about the bathhouse and then talk about the relic. After, go back to the bathhouse in the delphinium pool. It should work.

Going to the Delphinium or Narcissus baths give 1 charisma every time you go there up to a limit. You can also buy golden apples that give1 charisma from Murry for 50 gold each, up to 3 apples.

If you want the v1.9 Patreon (I assume) content, you can find it on f95zone for free. Would recommend.

You have completely enthralled me with this demo. Your writing is immaculate, the music you’ve selected is great, and I love the sound effects you’ve included. 

The only bad thing is how short it is so far, but I know it’ll get longer and better as time goes on. I’m excited to see where the story goes!

I saw two spelling/grammar mistakes and have a few suggestions.

Image 1: the first is that I think it should say "It doesn't sound" rather than "I doesn't sound". 

Image 2: the other was when Floyd mentions going downstairs. Floyd has said "downstair" rather than "downstairs". 

Image 3: Then, when Floyd says, "It is rich and dense", a suggestion is to have "it's" rather than "it is" since you had "it's" in the previous sentence.

Image 4:  "The confusion in your mind has completely been melted away". For that, you could possibly remove "been" to make it more concise and better to read. 

Image 5-6:  I noticed that the text often doesn't fill the box. You can see that "always" from image 6 should be able to fit in image 5. This, coupled with the lack of ending full stops, makes it slightly confusing. I don't know if not using full stops for the last sentence is a stylistic choice or not, but it makes it a bit weird to read. A possible fix is to shrink the font size enough to add a 4th line of text in a slide or add the ending full stop. I think shrinking the font size would be nice, as other visual novels usually have their regular font size smaller than this game.

Just a silly suggestion, but maybe after when Floyd says, "I think this will be a great partnership", or whatever he said, you could have him show a smile. I don't know if he's so stoic that he doesn't show much emotion, but I think that would be a nice touch.

Besides that, fantastic work Mabit! Can't wait to see more!

P.S. if you want someone to help with editing the script, I would love to help with this!