super fun and cute!
I feel like work could be done on the pacing of it all. It reads as one long continuous back and forth, maybe due to switching between characters entirely in first person. It would have been nice to have had a few small moments to take a breath, and I think third person might have helped with that - stepping outside the characters heads a little. Also, a progress bar that lets you know how far through the scene you are would be beautiful.
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