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The game made sense. It was easy to play and understand. In the beginning, we can see the text for the next passage after we type in our name in the background. You definitely used Mechanics and Dynamics, but the Aesthetics department needs some work. I am not entirely sure what the message is behind the game unfortunately, so some clarification on that is needed. I do feel it's necessary that you put in images, audio, gifs, and video because it is a requirement of the assignment but also because it helps convey the atmosphere of your game and adds some help to what the player is supposed to be feeling. I would suggest finding carnival related images audios, gifs, and videos. You also need more passages since you only have 9 passages. You do have a foldback mechanic which is fun. You technically only have 2 endings since there are two of the same bad ending and one good ending. I would suggest a new third option that could be neutral. 

The main concerns I have is if this game could be considered offense and if people could get upset about the content here. 
1. Does the story blend the well with the choices given?
2. Are the endings satisfying?
3. When you have a option and it takes you to another section, is there a narrative through line or does it seem choppy?
4. Are the multimedia assets helpful and or fit in nicely with the game?