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Simple fun when you don't want to think too much.

Some suggestions . . .

• Allow cousin marriage (they're nobles after all)
• Add pop up text with personality traits
• Simple individual life events

I love your take on character classes!  So much flavor.

Also, good job with layout and just the right amount of text/depth for a one booklet system with included adventure.

The anachronisms are off-putting.  But, maybe it is supposed to be alt-history.  If so, it wasn't clear to me.

I like the premise of older-self, younger-self.  It is well written enough and I found it to be informative.  I am not generally a fan of fiction that is primarily a vehicle to deliver a message, but that is just me.  It kept my interest.

I did expect more of a difference of perspective between older self and younger self, simply because that is what most of us experience (i.e., if only I knew then what I know now), but this story does the opposite (spoiler?) in that it uses the older self younger self theme to reinforce that the decisions made by younger self were the only rational options (if I understood it correctly).

I get the point, I think, although I am not sure I entirely agree with it.  On the other hand, if those choices led to an improved life, maybe they were the right decisions.

Still, it would have been nice to see deeper self reflection to balance the focus on external barriers and restraints.

Beautiful.

God, I hate committee work.