If you'd like I can work with you to put your script into English that is correct and common speech. I have done this with other game developers and I work for free. I am retired and enjoy Adult visual novels and get some satisfaction out of helping make them better for those that enjoy them as I do. Write to me at bassbignbad@gmail.com if you're interested in my assistance.
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PS.... I'm not sure if this is where you're going with the Petal story. But one of the most intriguing possibilities (for me at least) is that this story of the family harem is being driven, at least in large part, by Petal herself. (Which in some way makes her a female protagonist.) I am imagining that Petal has already had conversations with Bliss (has possibly even played sexually with Bliss) and together they have decided to corrupt dad, because of their own desires to have him included in their sexual fun, and they've decided to send Petal on the mission of being the first to draw dad in. I'm also imagining that the backstory with mom is that she's already had some sort of incestuous relationship in her family, and due to the conflicted state she is in, therein lies the truth about how her sexual issues with dad are rooted. So Bliss and Petal are also on a mission to see mom liberated from her conflict. How Moon gets drawn into this family romp is a story with many possible hooks... all of which can be very stimulating in development. Is she the conflicted older sister who has gone off because of her bisexual tendencies? Is she the frigid older daughter that is wrestling with her basic incestuous desires as well consequent to experiences in her youth with mom? Both? Lots of possibilities there.
I'm not sure if I haven't already joined your Discord. If I haven't I will do so.
I think it's possible to make female protagonists work and I've read several that I really enjoyed. Those that stand out are:
Good Girl Gone Bad
Our Red String - both by Eva KIss
Glamour by Dark Silver
Luna's Fall From Grace by Frozen Synapse
Each of these have different features that make them interesting and some share features in common that make them interesting. Both Luna's and Girl Gone Bad allow the player to determine how corrupted, or uncorrupted, the MC becomes. That can be fun for both extremes, the ones that want to turn the MC into a complete slut or, by contrast, want to develop the romantic interest of the MC. Our Red String has that same aspect but not to the extreme that Good Girl Gone Bad does. Glamour also shares that feature but with the MC there, Kate, it's pretty much an imperative that she must be corrupted. I think this corrupt-ability factor is essential to female pro's because, regardless whether the player is male of female, facing the fact that people that play these games are essentially those with extreme sexual natures, it permits the player to be personally engaged in the process and development pf the MCssexually. I think the issue with Penny is that she is basically, too good. She is altruistic and righteous in her nature. It is tough to parallel that with an aggressive sexual nature and make it believable. Her character, as it is, is good for a novel but not so good for an AVN. Or... at least... challenging for an AVN.
However, if it were me, rather than abandon the story I'd try to find the route to develop her character so that she becomes an advocate for open sexuality.... permitting all of the popular excepted expressions of it. She is in a lesbian (or at least bisexual relationship) and I think adding a more lascivious nature to her character and seeing her expand her own 'harem' would ad depth and appeal to her as an MC. And paths could be developed that permit Penny to take positions relevant to the player's sexual interests.
The paradigm of this genre depending on subscriptions is, as you know, a detriment to the quality of the product. The slow grind, for the sake of sub retention, defines structure and defeats the art. The Steam model would be far superior because it allows for quality to define income. I'd gladly pay more for better product and thus look forward to a given developer's work. And that model doesn't destroy the subscription model as developers could still have their own 'clubs' where subscribers could receive the latest work free or at a discount. The difference is that the developer can then produce his/her work according to an artful vision rather than a structured economy.
You say that you expect some growth in the market and, on that point, I'm a little surprised that we haven't seen a real investment from the porn industry at large to see this genre fueled. I see it happening a little... but my sense is that we're on the cusp of something much larger emerging.
I completed the latest version of Penny and have some thoughts to share on it. Female protagonists present a challenge based on their sexuality. You, apparently by nature, want to wrestle with basic ethical and moral arguments. That's understandable when dealing with topics like incest and the social mores associated. (And that's not even diving into the questions related such as the relevant influences in childhood sexual development.) Having said that, with Penny there's a number of issues in the story that are challenging and that illustrate a larger matter with female pro's. Penny appears to be compelled to committed monogamy due to her morals and ethics. That limits, to a large degree, the amount of sexual encounters that fit in the story's development. There are 'hints' thus far in the story of other potential sexual content developments but they are thin, so far, and seemingly extraneous to the main story line. So I am curious to see how that will be developed. And one question of female pro's is how to develop that engaging sexual content (that is required to appeal to the audience these AVNs are directed at) unless she is, for the sake of discussion, a nymphomaniac.... or at least, per some applied lens, appears to be. And it seems, based on the kinds of moral issues you want to address, there is some conundrum of opposing constructs there. I am married to a bisexual woman who, interestingly enough, is only interested in me as far as male encounters are concerned, but who is really horny to have lots of experiences with other women. Consequently, we don't fit very well in the mainstream swinger paradigm, at least not without some challenge, because it is, to large extent, male driven. Since I'm mostly a voyeur my wife and I fit together well, yet have some challenges whereas finding adventures for her. This is relevant as it highlights the difference in female sexuality and relates the general matter of how women characters are perceived. But the point about how to use female pro's in AVNs and keep them 'pervy' is challenging indeed. So, it will be interesting to see how Penny develops.
I'm working my way through the current version of Penny. Another thing you're doing here that is excellent is the associated story lines. You're a cut above the other dev's I've been exposed to. I only got interested in AVN's about 3 or 4 months ago. I've been through about 70 now... and while there are some very quality pieces of work out there... you're significantly more sophisticated. It also seems obvious that English is a first language for you.... or at least a second language. Not just for the ability to provide a more colloquial dialogue but the more elegant handling of speech. I am actually assisting with the dev's of Lust Academy helping them by going through their dialogue and 'Americanizing' it. Their work is good graphically and I like the premise of the story... it has great potential. But the dialogue... like most Russian developed work... is horrible. My sense of this genre is that it is still relatively young and it has so much exciting potential if it is produced by real artists. ... with real resources. It should not take years to produce completed versions of stories and I am confident that this will evolve rapidly once the real potential is experienced and the audience grows. I am going to go through my Patreon subscriptions and wean some of them off because I started supporting some when I was first getting into AVN's. I have a much better sense of which dev's are really deserving support. Once that's done I'll increase my support. I am really impressed by your work.
When will the story about Bliss commence? I know you're also working in the Penny story so my question is curiosity driven by the allure of this family harem development. Kind of like Sisterly Lust but WAY better. I'm hoping for similar girl/girl options with the mom and other sisters. Which assumes there'd also be a Moon path/story. Btw...your ability to suggest backstory through character dialogue hints is extraordinary! The mom's story seems to want to dovetail into a happy ending for all and I eagerly anticipate that reveal. Not saying more about my suspicions for fear of being a spoiler. Great work friend...I will support you!