Hi Rob
i am thinking about adding a sentence in my translation that refers to the choice of the player-characters. I think it would be helpful to mention if Saraneth should be chosen by one player. All other non chosen characters just don't appear in the story, but Saraneth is the centerpiece of the story.
You didn't mention this topic in your text. So do you think the choice of Saraneth as a PC is mandatory? Otherwise the GM has to control her as an NPC. But that would change the GM's role quite a bit.