I quite enjoyed what you've got going so far. I only noticed a single grammatical error! xD
In all seriousness, it seems like a solid start to an amazing story and I can't wait to see how it plays out. There's something about the art style that draws you in and I like the attention to detail with the facial expressions and blinks - of which you don't see in many VN's and games.
I'm excited to have stumbled across your project in it's early days so I can't wait to see where it goes from here!