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You've put down a lot of ground work here and I think some focus would help. Maybe try to narrow down the idea to a few key elements rather than trying to have the game do too much. What do you think the player fantasy is with this game? What do you see the action looking like? I was having trouble visualizing this as a card game which you mention being a possibility. Overall a lot of cool ideas here about the sheer ridiculousness, madness and darkness that comes from working in an office environment. 

I really liked the poker game incorporated. Really novel and a fun way to break up the text/reading. 

I really liked the poker game incorporated. Really novel and a fun way to break up the text/reading. 

Really intense game to  pull together in such a short period of time. Gave me the feeling of being questioned which was unsettling. I'm not sure  how my answers resulted in the ending I got. 

I'm not able to go full screen for some reason so I can't advance the text. Is this a bug anyone? I really want to play this!

I'm not able to go full screen for some reason so I can't advance the text. Is this a bug anyone? I really want to play this!

Really smart idea and I like the playful sarcastic tone of some of the dialogue. Fun to play. I'd  like to see something like this expanded to a fuller game. Nice job!

Really thoughtful story and character work here. I'm learning about writing in games and this has some really good examples of building out well rounded characters. I was challenged getting clear picture of some of the gameplay elements that a player would experience but on the whole this seems like a lot good ground work for your game. Nice job!

What a cool idea. Reminds be bit of The Sims if the house they were in was sentient. Very novel and I could see some really interesting story ideas evolving out of this concept. 

I really enjoyed the format and idea for the game. So fun and rich with personality.

Wonderful story and really smartly written. The tone was fun and playful which was a nice juxtaposition to the darker themes of the game.  Really nicely done. I'd watch out for reading challenging on some of your highlighted text, especially the black highlight with dark text colors. They can be difficult to read because there isn't enough contrast. Great job!

Soo creepy! Well done and good pacing.

Great comment and I totally agree! This is my first time ever writing anything like this. I'm new to game writing and this platform. Submitted on a whim as I'm in the middle of a class to learn more about narrative design. Thank you for the feedback!