I'm sure most of you have assumed by now, but the judging is probably not going to be complete by the end of December. Lots of stuff going on this month... Which I guess it's a surprise.
Alas, I have very little experience with 1 page RPGs.
I’d recommend finding a bunch and looking at them to see what you can learn. From what I HAVE read, they tend to be very focused on one particular thing.
Crash Pandas is focused specifically around playing as a gang of raccoons driving cars
Lasers and Feelings is specifically trying to emulate classic star trek.
The mechanics need to be ultra simple, ultra focused, and very cleanly conveyed so they fit neatly onto one page.
Nah, it's not that serious, and you don't need to submit in PDF format.
One of the things that I was going to include in my 'getting started' guide is that Google Drive is a wonderful way to make a tabletop RPG that's very sharable. You can actually export a Google Doc straight to a PDF.
Also if you're willing to do a little learning, the software suite that I'm using for my professionally made game just went COMPLETELY FREE, and it's very powerful.
So, I was going to make a cool 'getting started' video intended to help guide people through getting started making their own TTRPG, and showing how it's actually quite easy... But I'm very tired and won't be able to get it out in time for the start of the month.
Instead, I'mstarting a thread for people to ask 'newbie questions', and otherwise help people get started or work through road blocks.
I'm a seasoned Tabletop RPG author... Who hasn't actually finished a game yet, so any of my advice should be taken with a chunk of rock salt, but I'll do my best!
I'm probably not going to make a video, but I think I will try to write a brief article with the basics. I work best when I'm given a prompt, so if anyone has any questions about the process, PLEASE ask them in this thread.
I'm finally getting around to reading this adventure, and I'm loving it so far. Are you planning to write more adventures in this setting to follow it up?
I haven't played the game yet, but I want to compliment you on how perfect this itch page is. The muncher as a static element that follows you down the page is magnificent.
The protagonist's perspective is actually something I like. I'm kinda super into noncon/dubcon, so the fact that he's very upset with his situation, but shows signs of being somewhat aroused by it clicks pretty well with me. I'd definitely love to see it if you came back to complete the statue ending 👀
Thanks for the tip, that's tidy~!
And I'm just glad you like the art! I'm always worried about drawn fanart, can never be sure how folk might respond.
You may want to change the Quarrel + Fable character keeper link on Google Docs so that Everyone With The Link can view it. Currently it requires you to request access.
I've seen some folks just do a 'digital' version that has lower quality art just to make it run better on phones and low power tablets, so you might not have to worr about making one high quality and also small file size book.
This is extremely well written. A good mixture of body horror, regular horror and lewd.
I noticed a couple of minor spelling issues, but the only thing that stuck out to me was that you have a portion of Rocky's speech in his Thrall Ending colored as Jarby's speech.
I puzzled out all 12 endings. My favorite is probably Dillon's Thrall Ending. It's... comfy, if a little melancholy. The 'best' ending IMO is Dillon's Freedom Ending. It feels like it has the strongest setup for 'doing something about it'.
Spoilers below:
I appreciate the inclusion of things that grey the water on freeing people. Andrew preferring the hypnosis to his old life is a good touch, and Rocky being completely broken without it is an interesting (and horrifying) wrinkle. I like the plot detail that the more hypnotized a thrall is, the dumber they are. It's a well thought out drawback to vampire thralldom.
I love Andrew and Jarby's relationship. I love that, despite Jarby clearly holding all of the power, Andrew can boss him around like the Big Bro he's hypnotized to be like.
I love all of the characters. Except Throckmorton, he can jump off a bridge (I'll help). Everyone has an interesting bit of nuance to them, and with all the enthralled folks, the little peek at who they were before they were enthralled is very interesting. Lots of unanswered questions that are interesting to ponder.
IF you were to ever return to this project (I read that you at some point just had to call it done. I know what that's like) I would personally like to be able to get more lewd with everyone. It's possible my particular path veered away from some of that stuff, but the scene where you just ram your face into Andrew's armpit was 👌👀💦 and I was hoping for more like it. It does sort of undercut the frantic nature of your attempt to escape, but there are some hints that the MC is kind of horny about his predicament even if he's also horrified by it (and horny horror is my favorite kind of horny). Dillon's huge cock comes to mind...
And there feels like a huge lack of overt interaction with Jarby himself. I was hoping that waiting with any of the NPCs would allow an interaction with Jarby, even if it's just a few words of terse conversation before he knocks you out. Maybe just an option to suck his dick while he's sleeping, or bury his face in your armpit (to smother him??? He probably doesn't need to breathe.). Jarby is heccin cute, even if he's a goddamn monster.
Anyway, thanks for coming to my ted talk. Sorry for posting a wall of text, but I really enjoyed this. It's got me thinking about how things could go. How one might achieve something resembling a good ending. (Get a steel mirror and force Jarby to hypnotize himself into not taking any more thralls and freeing you, Dillon, and your beau? Would killing him break the hypnosis for everyone? Could you become a more powerful vampire and take control of Jarby's situation?)
No problem! If you haven't, you might want to check your other games in the bundle too, I encountered the same issue with another of your Wyrd of Stromgard modules.
