To put it simply - perfection
From the title screen to the very ending, through all the scenes everything is polished.
I'm gonna rant here a little because it's been a while since I read something and needed to call all my friends just to tell them "drop whatever you're doing and read this"
PEAK CHARACTER DESIGN - You've created your characters in such great way I know who they are just by looking at them and it's just a MASSIVE talent. The experience in character creation is visible from the very beginning.
AMAZING STORYTELLING - You know your way around a story and what's more important you know how to keep reader engaged in the story that has simple concept. Something I really enjoyed are all these little scenes where characters are just eating or drinking coffee because that's where all the magic happens, that's where characters rest and we rest with them. It's very important to make reader feel like they're part of the world and you are doing exactly that. You perfectly keep tension in the story, not too much drama, not too much mundane and I let myself to do a little stalking session and I know you made your own RPG and again this experience is really visible in your work.
MASTERFUL USE OF MUSIC - I'm gonna say it again - simple yet exciting. I can't say the music alone is amazing but the way you are using this music, these simple sound effects, you exactly know what you are doing and you elevate the vibes with it.
I can't say much about language because I'm also not a native speaker, but... People keep forgetting how much work is usually needed for the whole process of editing the text (especially if you write it in your native language and then you translate it to english - I was there I know it's a challenge) and if I remember correctly this game is made by only two people in only a month - so you did a great job. If I even saw any error in text it was not enough for me to think that's killing the presented story.
Sorry for this unnecessary wall of text 🙏🙏🙏 I'm simply amazed easy 5/5/5/5/5
I hope to see more from you because you have BIG talent and even GREATER experience.
Thank you for this incredible reading experience 🙏