I mean it's great for a proof of concept as far as the story goes. Though the introduction felt more like a summary that could have been garnered from your title. That being said, I wish you luck with your story and hope you continue it.
Ultimately it is your vision and we as players/readers are just along for the ride. My honest opinion is just tell your story the way you intended to tell it and thanks for sharing.
Like the proof of concept. Definitely look forward to further chapters. If I could make one observation, save the animations for pivotal scenes and combat. Other than that I wish you luck with your story moving forward,
I am thoroughly enjoying this however, I unlocked the Level I and II of the purification perks and they are not working on the Night Moonstar while purifying with Enya.