I sadly have not decided this yet. I've spent a lot of money on the game so far, so I may charge for it. But on the other hand, I want people to be able to play it and enjoy it, so I may just accept the costs and make it free anyway. The final version's release is too far away for me to decide with certainty.
Thank you so much for this comment!! This means more to me than I can possible describe. I've been in desperate need for good constructive criticism for this project.
I have tried to write off and on for years, but this is one of the first times I've tried to write a proper romance, and I can see how Sparrow's relationship with Daren may come off a bit oddly. It seems that people unanimously agree that Lilith is the better match, so to me this reads as "improve Sparrow as much as possible." I am very glad that people like Lilith so much though, she and Shamy are probably my favorites to write.
I created the project knowing Shamy was a pretty flat character, but End was a last-minute addition because I felt like I needed a sixth character that filled a specific role (specifically his talk with Daren about Lilith's condition; I couldn't think of another character in the cast that would give that talk). I never thought about how flat he was compared to the others, but I would like to improve his character if I can. I have considered removing him from the story completely, since without that one scene he doesn't do much in the story, but currently he shares a connection with a character that appears in the second act, so I may need to keep him around for that reason. Maybe I can replace some of his appearances with Tower, maybe I can give him a better arch (he's meant to have a bigger role later, but not for a while). Still a lot of details to mull over...
I agree that the first few days are a bit slow since there isn't any major story beats taking place, but I'm hoping to improve it over time. I'm currently planning out the scenes for the second act, and by doing so I'm hoping to work backwards and adjust and improve the scenes in the first act as well.
The art contributions from others have been great, although I have often wondered about adjusting many of them for the final version, to make them more "on model" like you described. I definitely feel like some of them, while good, are a bit uh... distracting. I'm really glad you liked the transformation at the end, though!
Thanks again for your feedback and your kind words. Someday I'd like to try and recruit a proper team to help me write the best story I possibly can, and get some artists that can help contribute as well. I'm glad that there are minimal grammatical errors in the story at least, but I know there's a lot to improve upon and feedback like this is an excellent motivator.
Thanks so much for you comment!! Yes, I've been told it's quite long for a demo lo. But I'm thrilled that you and your friends like Sparrow!! I hope to draw her more very soon as I work on the final version.
