This is good. The characters are sympathetic and believable (though Timber is perhaps too well-adjusted for having grown up in such isolation), the story is interesting, and the world is described evocatively.
If I might offer one slight criticism though: You've overused the word "melt". Doing a Ctrl-F on the script finds 27 of them, of which only 6 are literal.
Since you want feedback, I'll tell you what I think. I like the story, it's extremely cute, and the art is decent. Aside from what others have already said about making it more than just "kinetic", there are a couple things that could be improved. First there are a few mistakes in the writing, like "smrik". Second, I think it would benefit from more sound effects.
0.1.0 gave me a black screen. 0.2.0 works ok, with no compatibility settings needed.
btw, did you know that this game has been "flagged for moderator review"? That means no one can view the devlog without being logged in, and trying to download the game throws up a scary warning (though it can be bypassed).
A game where you pick up vixens and make them wet.
Here are some of the things I liked:
* The gameplay is very simple, mostly hitting things and/or picking them up and throwing them. Nonetheless there is a lot of variation in the levels, so it never feels repetitive.
* The character design and art are superb. It all feels very cosy and cute.
* Palindromic poetry!
* Vixens everywhere!
* The bonus stages and collectibles provide a reason to replay the levels.
Some things I didn't like so much (a much shorter list):
* Switching between items should skip over ones that have been used up. It wastes precious time having to cycle through half a dozen slots when there are only one or two things that are useable.
* No difficulty setting. Though I found the difficulty to be about right for me, I expect that some people will want a more casual experience (one of the items makes most of the levels very easy, but you need to get far enough into the game to get it), while others will want it to be harder.
This is a game that had a lot of effort and thought put into it. It's well worth the money, and you should buy it.
Get an error when trying to choose not to buy a cinnamon roll. Looks like this might give away some of the story, so anyone that doesn't want hints about what decisions to make should avert their eyes from the following...
``` I'm sorry, but an uncaught exception occurred. While running game code: File "game/script.rpy", line 5985, in script call call chapter1 from _call_chapter1 File "game/story/chapter4.rpy", line 3648, in script $ goodEnding += 1 File "game/story/chapter4.rpy", line 3648, in <module> $ goodEnding += 1 ^^^^^^^^^^ NameError: name 'goodEnding' is not defined. Did you mean: 'goodEnd'? -- Full Traceback ------------------------------------------------------------ Traceback (most recent call last): File "game/script.rpy", line 5985, in script call call chapter1 from _call_chapter1 File "game/story/chapter4.rpy", line 3648, in script $ goodEnding += 1 File "renpy/ast.py", line 1187, in execute renpy.python.py_exec_bytecode(self.code.bytecode, self.hide, store=self.store) ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ File "renpy/python.py", line 1260, in py_exec_bytecode exec(bytecode, globals, locals) ~~~~^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ File "game/story/chapter4.rpy", line 3648, in <module> $ goodEnding += 1 ^^^^^^^^^^ NameError: name 'goodEnding' is not defined. Did you mean: 'goodEnd'? Windows-10-10.0.19044-SP0 AMD64 Ren'Py 8.4.1.25072401 Coda 0.9.0 Wed Nov 12 19:01:24 2025 ```
Indeed. If RalivDev had posted here that he was running out of money then I would gladly have contributed some by buying the game again here for a large amount, or contributing to a Kickstarter or something. I don't expect every early access game to be completed, but just dropping it and not telling us is not going to win any favours.
Since there's a chance this page might end up deleted and this might be the last chance to comment, I'd like to say thanks. It's clear that a lot of effort went into making this game, with the writing, art, musc, and voice acting all being top notch.
And thank you for continuing to post updates here even after you were no longer able to sell the game.
This is actually pretty good. It's simple, but interesting enough for a short game. The character art is excellent. The smug look on the cat's face after you "deal with" her side effects is priceless. I can imagine this forming the basis for a larger and more sophisticated game.
I think my only real criticism is one someone mentioned before - one of the potions has side effects that are just a variation of another potion. It would have been better if all three were distinct.
I'd like to report a tiiiny little bug or two.
1) The mirror showed me as blue, and the text said "BLUE" too. It's clearly the same blue as the rightmost potion, but the correct one is the second from the right. Maybe you'd call the one blue too, but it's not the same colour.
2) A character uses the word "alluded" when they should have said "eluded".
A compelling story presented with good writing, good art even where it's just sketches, and catchy music.
It's also realistic, with perfectly nice girls I'm not interested in practically throwing themselves at me, while the one I'm really interested in tries very hard to be unobtainable, *sigh".
This game is already worth playing in its unfinished state, and could be really good once it's finished.
Anyway, I wanted to suggest selling the game here for "name your own price", as I'm sure some people would be willing to donate to you that way, since it's less friction than having to make an account with yet another external service.
I actually quite like that you can request that an NPC assume any position, even if you lack the equipment and just go through the motions. You can offer those ineffective positions to NPCs too, but they don't accept if they don't have the right bits. I wouldn't mind if that was possible too. Maybe put the ineffective positions under a sub menu to make it clear that they don't "work", but can still be used.
Another thing is that if one NPC offers themselves to another NPC, you can press E to steal them for yourself. This is kinda funny, but probably shouldn't be allowed.
I like the idea of this game, and it looks like it could turn into something worthwhile. It's hard to give feedback on something that's so early in development, but here's some notes I took after playing for a while:
* Need adjustable crosshair size, because it's tiny on a 4k monitor. Adjustable colour would be good too.
* The game should pause when looking at the map etc. It's no fun being shot while trying to navigate.
* Health regen is far too fast. Having any at all makes you effectively invulnerable.
* You can pick an already equipped weapon as the reward when exiting a level, which removes it, potentially leaving you without a weapon.
* Bosses need to be much harder. They don't have much in the way of weaponry, and don't chase you if you snipe them from out of range.
* Some weapons collide with your own sprite, e.g. the shotgun projectiles are blocked by your hind legs.
* If you pick up the Bionic Tentacles, then the next time you change level it will get stuck on the loading screen.
* It's not clear what weapons count as primary or secondary before picking them up.
* Pressing up when hacking should go back through the command history, so if you typo a file name, you can correct it rather than having to type it all again.
At the time of writing, this game has no gameplay screenshots, only one one-word comment, a 2-star rating, and there's no other information about it anywhere out on the 'net. This makes me sad because it means that most people coming here will assume it's a bad game and pass it over. It's most certainly not a bad game though! Here's a short review so you can have a better idea of what to expect.
First of all, the worst part is the art. The backgrounds are AI generated. The character art is good enough, but all the characters are the same base with only different clothes and hair. The rest of the art is... well, at least it's clearly made by a human.
The writing on the other hand is good, despite having quite a few spelling mistakes. Really good in fact. Even though I'm not much of a fan of visual novels, this one had me so engrossed that I put in the effort to hunt down every possible ending, of which there are 15, plus a few others that aren't counted (like if you fail so badly you die). The characters all have distinct and believable personalities (Coffee-chan is my favourite). There are a lot of meaningful choices to make, and there are a large number of wildly different paths through the game. There is a lot of humorous fourth-wall breaking.
Although there are romantic endings for some of the charaters, I don't think the "dating simulator" tag fits.
And that's it. You should definitely play "A Peppering Of Death". And learn how to use scissors.
