Just a bit of critic here
Can you add more talk or action options to may in the beginning? As I play this, all she says "We have a lot of the same tastes, ya know?"
Add some more things to do around the game. Once your in Mays house, there's no turning back. Even if you leave, you cant get back in.
One more thing, are the characters supposed to be from the movie, How All This Happened? if so, who are we playing as?