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I've been following this game's development and playtesting early builds. I'm really happy to see what you've accomplished, and can't wait to see what future chapters hold.

Hey there!

Thanks for the reply! On the topic of the 4chan comment, I was being a bit intentional in specifying "bad" greentext, as most of the ones you'll see are just silly fun. A lot of greentexts are given from the perspective of an intentionally flawed "Anon". The stereotypical "Anon" is an asshole, but more of a goofy fun one. Some writers lean in more on the first half though, doubling down on Anon as a jerk while failing to capture the fun irreverent tone and often just telling stories of a bad person doing a bad thing and hurting people.

Admittedly, that's a bit of an extreme comparison to Dimon in even many of the scenes or lines I don't care for. You did catch both of the "actual" issues I was feeling though. 

In some instances, it's less about poor taste, and more that Dimon is going over the same points of his devious plans too frequently and coming off as trying too hard. In other moments, like the bonus scene, it does feel like the tone changes to something a bit too "real", losing the playful edge held through most of the game. 

Like I said though, I think that might just be a difference in taste. I like voyeur plenty, so the camera stuff works for me, whereas non-con can leave a bad taste in my mouth. If you're trying to make a game featuring non-con, there's really no getting around the fact that people who don't like that subject won't enjoy those elements.

Regarding the "Bait" options, the issue wasn't that I couldn't tell when they had new events available. I did notice the exclamation points when they appeared. The issue that I had was that if there wasn't a new event unlocked, clicking the button effectively just wasted a time segment. Visiting a character without an event was a pure nothing interaction. Dimon would seek them out, fail to find them or see that they're busy, and then leave.

As a player, it felt like the game was lying to me. I was being offered the choice to talk to characters, and yet choosing to do so didn't actually let me talk to them. That's a problem when the event still burns a timeslot, just like all the rest.

This is why my suggestion was to put a small rotating pool of basic events with mild rewards on these options. The rotating pool makes it so that you might get something new on your first few visits, and the mild rewards makes it so that even when you've seen it all, there is at least something gained by the selection. 

That's just what made sense to me though, and the simplest option would really be to just hide the buttons when events aren't present. Or hell, just play the interaction of Dimon failing to have a conversation, and don't advance time when it happens. That'd fix everything too.

Sorry that ended up being so long, condensing takes time and I'm lazy. Like I said before though, I am still interested in the game, and am looking forward to future updates.

Thanks!

You've got some very nice stuff cooking here. I played the game a few times, getting game overs on a few attempts and actually managing to reach the official cut-off on one. The experience was mostly positive, as I appreciated the art, gameplay, and much of the lewd material quite a bit. I did have a few complaints, which I would like to list here in the hopes that they can be improved for the full release:

#1: Dimon is so close to the "entertaining asshole" sweet spot imo, but sometimes he leans just a little too far into "actual sex offender" territory and reads like a bad 4Chan greentext. I recognize that this may be a matter of taste, but it feels like more of an issue because for a majority of the game's runtime, Dimon is completely palatable. 

It stands out against the majority of scenes when Dimon actually talks about blackmailing women into sex, or when we get transition text saying he spent the weekend bullying women. The bonus scene especially did not land well with me after playing the full game. Like I said though, matter of taste. You gotta make something that makes you happy first and foremost, so take this opinion for whatever it is worth to you: I would have personally found Dimon more entertaining, as a pervert who takes lewd pics and schemes to sleep with women, if the culmination of his goals weren't non-con.

#2: I found the balance between events and efficiency a little difficult to manage, even while trying to stay on top of things. After a few playthroughs, I could definitely tell what the most effective route was, and I knew what events needed to happen by what times to prevent a bad ending. It's fine if you can't get every possible event in an efficient run, but I think a bit more signposting could be done on what goals need to be hit by what times. The scene you get in a game over where Olga tells you where you messed up is helpful at least.

#3: Bait options. There was never a reason to talk to a character who didn't actively have an event going on, and this is something I only realized by trying to do so. I don't think these should be listed as options at all if the end result is "nothing". Choosing to decorate your room may be functionally useless (as far as I could tell), but it does at least offer a cosmetic change. I'd also, personally, consider the "Dimon's Hobbies" choice to have no value in its current form, although I will concede that if you like listening to Dimon talk, the scene of him reflecting on his hobby is arguably reward enough.

If you want to leave the option to talk to characters outside of events around, I think the best implementation would be to have a few standard events that offer small inconsistent benefits. Maybe sometimes you gain free EXP, other times you get a temporary Search or Sales boost, some you may find bonus Materials, or if you're lucky you might just get a hint about some less obvious photo opportunities (Ones you don't just get by going to an event, like how you can get a pic of Senna by looking for materials at night). Come up with like 3 of those random events for each character, and it becomes a great place to spend any free time you might find yourself having.

That is assuming you have free time though, which admittedly doesn't come up much in the current system if you go to every event offered and are working to collect all the materials you need.

Those are all my thoughts. I enjoyed this little slice of a game, and am definitely gonna be keeping an eye on the project moving forward!