Hi, I loved the music you chose for this game! The first track is so good~
Glad we got to meet all the LI in the first chapter (Dimitri whaaat👀) and it's good to know mc won't have to learn to fight again🙂↕️ what a way to end the chapter!
Here are some little things I found:
- suspicious
You have a meeting with The Crimson Court in an hour. They'll already be suspcious
- vultures, and the extra space between the pronoun variable and the 's
and that he 's in a weakened state, the court will descend like vultutres.
- these also have a space after the pronoun
I'm not leaving him, Lux. Not while he 's like this.
And if you stay he 'll be as good as dead.
- the ,,
Dread fills your chest,, and you're sure that, somehow, you've made a mistake.
- these have a missing space between sentences
It takes a moment for your eyes to adjust without the moonlight to guide you.But the outlines slowly sharpen.
Drawing in a shaky breath, you step forward.The carpet beneath your feet muffles your steps.
- wander
"I won't wonder far."
- hand
He knocks the gun from your had before you can pull the trigger.
- there, and the missing space between sentences
Lestat and Zero are standing their, with Snow flanking the two.All three turn toward you
- extra s in chandelier
A chandeliers crashes down from above.