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Nice mechanics. 

Idea:

Place a small pic of the persons of interest on the nav places. This will help know which place I need to go and interact. 

The clock needs to be changed to a general time like 8am, 12pm, 3pm, 6pm, 10pm etc. to reflect the time of day. Its hard to tell what time of day it is sometimes. Its always pointed to 7 o'clock.

If it takes more than 2-3 choices then that is way overkill. Place a note in parentheses next to choice to know which choice is best ex. (F+1)(P+1) and so forth. 

Nice work so far and let me know if any of these help.

$2.99 isn't any more than what I have paid in the past for a Visual Novelette that had less quality and a mediocre storyline. After reading chapters 1-4 I was planning on donating $5.00 anyways ($1.00 a chapter seemed fair) because it was so good, I mean really good. Heck who am I fooling "Petal Among Thorns" is the best by far. But hey now I can get the whole novelette for less than $5.00. AWESOME! You have some talent my friend. I only wish this story went on forever. I love it. Great work! Great work! Great work!