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thank you so much for the kind words and feedback!! yea it seems like the auto-skip is causing more issues than intended, so i just posted an update that removes them.

this was a fun short read! congrats on your first vn, i hope you had fun and that you make more! :)

• really delightful art and a fun read! the sprites + designs are sooo expressive and probably my favorite part. the plot reminds me a bit of jennifer's body and it was fun seeing emily make things messier.
• since there’s a lot of characters it was a little difficult to keep track of who was speaking at the beginning, but i got into a groove toward the middle. i think it would’ve benefitted from some indicators like color coding the names based on design, etc.
• the dialogue / banter feels natural & true to a college theatre friend group!

i think you'll get more plays if you add more screencaps of the main gameplay + a word count! a lot of people put off playing things if they're not sure how long they are. i checked the script in renpy's lint function and it's about 28k words.

fun read and absolutely scrumptious art!! also new yawrk mention... i recognize those cloisters....

i’m a big last unicorn fan (i sewed amalthea’s dress once...) so this was such a treat!! lovely prose and designs. playing off of the unicorn mythology / using a maiden to capture one is such prime yuri material.

while coming to comment on this this i accidentally searched “to my only desire” in google instead of itch, and it was very cool reading about the matching tapestry. checking out the postmortem now for all the other historical details! 

thank you for the kind words! the note would've shown up if you selected "pre-puberty", so you would select it if you haven't gone through puberty yet. most people go through puberty by age 18, hence the "why are you playing this" note. there are different requirements to pass the beighton scale portion of the screener, depending on if you've gone through puberty or if you're older than 50.

aaaa i was wondering where this one was, i've been looking forward to it ever since i saw the art in fluxer! agnes gives me cuteness aggression and these other designs are scrumptious as well. i will play very soon. hopefully tomorrow.

i love this!!! such a nice first project with lovely aesthetics. i really like the effects n music you chose, and the text is poignant <3 i hope you make more stuff in the future!

really cool and atmospheric with lovely prose and art! the juxtaposition between antiquated forms of healthcare ("balance of blood and bile") on a very recent health event is really effective. i'm really happy to see a less "traditional" vn entry in this jam, they're always my favorites!

this is definitely in the process of happening somewhere and now i have to sit with that fact ty

really good work, was a very cinematic experience. i liked the text blips a lot...

i had to use my neck fan to drown out the sound of reporters talking about the lysteria outbreak on the waiting room tv

thanks so much for reading, i'm glad you enjoyed!! i'd defer to your doc's experience; the clinical criteria isn't perfect (they're updating it later this year) especially the beighton scale. it doesn't check common problem areas like shoulders, ankles, and hips so some docs have separate checks for those too. without an actual genetic test for hEDS yet the presentations are pretty varied

OLDER WOMEN YURI!!!!!!!!!
soooo moody and atmospheric! i love historical works and collage so this was such a treat to read. the prose naturally plunges me into the time and place; i immediately started reading in a prairie accent in my mind like a good early 1900s novel.

the collages are masterfully done; i especially like the newsprint filter treatment used. i also really liked the little “vignette” pages that split up the chapters and further set the scene. i really really like the box indicators for who’s speaking! i haven’t seen that before but it works really well for the style, and i could see it from my periphery while reading the text box.

i do think it would benefit from a little more foley or sound effects indoors in some scenes, but it being mostly silent made it easy to focus and read. the library of congress would likely have a very fitting public domain song for the menu or something.

since i was playing on instant text, the {nw} tag made me skip a couple lines where characters got cut off as a heads up! 

absolutely lovely and engaging read, will be recommending to friends!

the opening was such a good hook!! tbh the entire time i was reading i kept thinking about the "evil intimidating horse" image you posted and yea. airi is an evil and intimidating horse. it was really uncomfortable and cool seeing the foreshadowing develop + inevitable conclusion

lovely and engaging writing, both girls felt like real people i’d know! cowvetica’s internal struggle and the casual digs felt really true to life, and i love the paper doll approach for the sprites. <3 

aaaa i'm glad you were able to push through, it means a lot! thank you for reading <3 <3 <3

waaaaaaa thank you vn senpai i'm glad you enjoyed!! ;-;

-that is an INTRO. what a hook!! the visuals married with everything is stunning

-i love the push / pull throughout the whole piece while still having a very obvious power imbalance. such fun and playful banter!! and the chess to give the illusion of being on more equal footing… so cool

-i can taste all the words in my mouth in the chess part. really yummy prose and the music felt like it had just as much bravado.

i'll be thinking about this one for a long time, really inspiring to get weirder w/ renpy

thanks for checking it out regardless! the hEDS self-screening is still playable separate to the story if you want to check for hypermobility :>

thank you so much for reading!! the switching bodies line was from me and Yea...... when my body first started falling apart with increasing speed i felt a constant pit in my stomach wanting to check if things were normal so badly. i started reading a lot of body swapping fiction especially with ill characters at the time ;-; i think getting a really strong body for 1 day would really motivate me to work out once i swapped back LOL

really, really humbled and grateful. thank you everyone who's shared and played and said such kind words, i really wasn't expecting anything close to this, much less within the first few days. i've teared up like 20 times over the past 48 hours. i'll try to get to replying to everyone but please imagine me as a sopping wet tearful beast reading your comments.

this concept meant a lot to me and i'm incredibly relieved that it's landed with people ;-; giving everyone a big hug

ALSO PLEASE TRY THE SCREENER!! i'm really curious if anyone gets a surprise hEDS or HSD diagnosis from this! i put more code in that thing than the actual vn and the full screening is like 4000 words on its own

waaaaaa thank you!!!! ;-; i'm so happy it spoke to you, thank you for the kind words! 

thank you for trying it out regardless!! take care of yourself <3

thank you so much for playing!! the medical tests aren't all hEDS-related but were probably the least favorite ones we've had, very happy it resonated with you :'o

thank you, i'm so glad to hear it resonated!!

thank you so much!! 

thank you so much for playing + the thoughtful review! made me tear up fr, i'm overjoyed that you think so highly of it ;-;