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Hello Namless!

Good job on this RPG, the work you did is awesome and the fact you are sharing it for free is even more awesome|

I've been reading the Players Handbook, here's some types or edits I think could be done:

• On page 10,  Weiland's stats show DEF:13, on page 11, second line on the right it says "Weiland's defence is 15, so its a hit". Seems to be a typo.
  • Since the Adventure example might be the very first intro to ttrpg for some players, I would put a bit more detail for the hit on Talia (English is not my first language, so feel free to adapt it as you wish ;-) ): "The Wyvern can make two attacks in a round, so the The referee makes a second attack against Talia. He rolls a d20 to attack (11) + monster skill d4 (3) = 14. Since Talia's defence score is 10, that's a A hit which causes d4 (1) point of damage."
  • At then end of page 11, you write "Weiland strikes true with a long sweeping blow severing the neck of the creature, the head of the creature flies off and the body of the creature slumps to the ground, dead." That's three "creature" references in the same sentence, maybe it could be shortened to "Weiland strikes true with a long sweeping blow severing the neck of the creature, its the head of the creature flies off and its the body of the creature slumps to the ground, dead." Doing so will also give you space on the layout to insert the previous suggested details.
• On page 21, on the left you refer to "Skills describes the hero's talent..." but looking at the character sheet just beside it, the "Skills" is in fact a subsection of a bigger group named "Talents". If we compare it to the Character Record Sheet on page 62, we can notice that the whole "Talents" section is renamed "Skills" and the "Skills" subsection is renamed "Physical". So I would update the text on p.22 to reflect that and also update the picture to match the Character Record Sheet.
• On page 21 also, you refer to "Equipment; list weapons, armour..." but that section is named "Inventory" in the Character Record Sheet. So I would refer to "Inventory; list weapons, armour..." instead.

I'll continue my reading and let you know if I find something else!

Thanks!