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Really tight writing, and the different routes are interesting.  I like how you aren't ever referred to with pronouns and can be gay.  Love to see more like this from them. :)

In my opinion, I think the grammar could be run over with a fine tooth comb, at least for the flavor text portion/main character's thoughts/descriptions.  When your game is text based its important to have really tight writing.  I think it could benefit from some quick editing, like replacing words that have been used twice in a row, and working some sentences out to flow better.  Also, I'm not sure if this was purposeful, but when changing sprites, the quick half-fade between changes before the character comes back was a little distracting and messed with my eyes a bit.  I'm not sure if anyone else had this problem, or if this is even fixable or done on purpose or what.

That said, this game's strong suit is the dialogue of the other characters.  It's very focused, while giving the characters a lot of personality in only a few words.  It's subtle, but it has a lot of charm and it made me play again right after finishing.  The VA crew is talented as well, and brings a lot of life to the characters too.  The scares were pretty decent too, and gave a real sense of creeping dread the longer time went on, with so many subtle clues on top of the more obvious ones that added to the suspense.  I like that it doesn't give you all the answers right away, and the writer didn't fall into the trap of telling everything right away.  The art is great as well; the style is appealing and the character designs are great as well.  As a background artist myself, I think the backgrounds were well made as well.

I'm really excited to see where this goes in the future.  It's clear that the creator is very talented so I can't wait to see what they do in the future!