Just saw these winners now. Congrats to them. This was my first jam and it was a great experience. And a great way to find awesome IF to read :)
I too felt it was a bit slow but I also liked the feeling it gave to the text. It's a nice technical touch regardless.
Very nice descriptions and pacing. It feels like a great short story turned to IF and that is rarely easy.
Beautiful writing. I have lots of questions; the good kind