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You can 'fly' in the cave.  And it's easy to get stuck on invisible objects

The concept for the visual style is really well thought out. The white around the linework from using the fill tool really weakens the game visuals though. I'd recommend colouring on a different layer underneath your lineart layer to fix this.

Got stuck in the cheese planet

Dev-wise it's really interesting with the arrow that points to the moon. And the boost cool down is a good mechanic. The visual style is quite nostalgic, reminds me of classic flash games on Newgrounds

Visually, the moving stars are very headache-inducing and really disorienting.

Bugs

The camera exposes untextured areas at the beginning. Also the player doesn't flip when changing directions.

Strengths

The map is very unique. I like your use of textured brushes to make it look like real canvas.

Weaknesses

To improve

Even if it's just in the game description, explain what the aim of the game is. 

Bugs 

Major bugs in market square

Strengths

I see a lot of potential in the plot

Weaknesses

There are a lot of grammatical errors, such as spelling mistakes, missing commas and random capitalisation. Considering the game relies on text, I strongly suggest getting that fixed.

Since your game is set in Norwich, you could take some photography in order to provide visual aid for the player.

Bugs

Characters' dialogue starts from the beginning if you move away, maybe make it so the player can't move until all the dialogue is read. Also the fountain restricts movement even though the perspective suggests that it's in the foreground.

Strengths

The art style is really cute. I like the chibi style. The slight moving to imitate breathing during the idle animation is a good touch.

 Weaknesses

The walking speed is super slow, I'd recommend increasing the speed. Also the stars are really small and easy to miss, maybe increase the size?