Excellent work, very dark in the best kind of way!
(spoilers below this point)
I’ve never been institutionalized, but that’s always been one of my deepest fears. The hospital vibes (especially Marisol’s interactions with the staff) kept me on edge the whole time I was reading. Especially the admin showing up and misgendering Marisol - immediate chills down my spine. I almost didn’t even notice when she started lying to cover for her change in behavior, because that’s exactly what I would do in that situation.
The depiction of passive transphobia is… yeah. Pretty sure I’ve had every one of those thoughts and reactions at least one.
‘Mister’… Funny how something that you’ve been called your entire life can suddenly sting so bad.
ouch.
I want to fight to correct her but the effort it’d take already overwhelms me. Better to stay a small target.”
OUCH.
I also appreciate the realistic depiction of adult grooming - that’s something rarely portrayed correctly in any work, let alone one set in a medical institution. Being limited to Marisol’s manipulated, actively-skewing perspective makes for a great reading experience. And I love when “tell the truth” is presented as an available option, but disabled - like some part of Marisol understands that she’s making a huge mistake, but she’s become too obsessed with Rose to make any other choice. 10/10 indirect storytelling.
These lines from the end resonate deeply with me:
It can’t be helped now, but it’s okay. It all changes, warps into something new. My scars are no different. They’ve come a long way from the open wounds they once were. So have I.
I only recently found a similar level of acceptance and forgiveness towards my own scars, and it’s been a long and painful road to get there. This was a very sweet note to end on, and it shows that Marisol really has made progress - even if she does then leave with Rose into a probably-unsafe situation.
Finally, I felt this part in my bones. Sent me right back to middle school and the hell of growing up as an undiagnosed autistic child.

