I feel like I could get really into this but the story is in need of an editor or some kind of proofreading. There's definitely a good story happening but the prose is somewhat clumsy at times and it takes me out of the experience.
Hello! Thank you for checking it out. As for an editor, that's something that I'm considering; however, it is also difficult to find said editor at the moment. For now, I'll just have to proofread when I have the time. I hope you'll be able to enjoy the IF after it goes through the first round of line editing/proofreading. ❤️❤️