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Hey there, nice work!

I didn't have the chance to actually run the game, but I read through the PDFs. Coming up with a full RPG system is a challenge, and clearly communicating all of the details is even tougher (in my opinion, anyway). I think you did a great job on both fronts.

The structure of the game helps players pick up and play (especially on the GM's side). I would've liked to have some more examples of play / scenarios that you're imagining too, though - examples of the situations that you're excited about is a great way to jump-start my imagination too as I'm reading it.

The formatting and presentation of the rules PDFs was also very nice. I was very impressed by how cleanly sections managed to break on the half-page-column boundaries.

If you'd like to have a dump of stream-of-consciousness feedback, I typed up some notes as I read over it: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ttTFpgfRbTOJBc_jeV8P_IfZVUpDsLChkbEkj0-IKmI/...

I hope your plans to continue working on it go well, I think tabletop RPG design is a super cool thing to do!

I'm speechless, thank you so much for the in depth analysis of my work. Especially the extended google docs pages. I have only opened it and saw the amount of notes and came running back to thank you. I really appreciate that level of scrutiny! This is the best thing to come from doing this game jam. Thank you again.