the visuals are good. the story is okay. but the MC is a plank. there should be sexual tension between characters of an ero story. also, the MC never gets flustered, making him very unrelatable. he is either cool fighter guy or nice guy that cares. and while thats good and all, it lacks whats needed to push the narrative forward. you feel bored following him along because you cant relate (and c'mon, we are also here for some bed action). i hope you take note of this and improve your writing. wish you the best.