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Do you have 'Fixing broken English' on your To-Do-List?

Like do you have some plan for it? Like when/how you would do it?

I'd rate your English 3/5. It's all understandable and it's not so wrong that it's comedic or cringe.

Almost all of your mistakes can be easily forgiven. All except: "Me either".

"I liked it" "Me either". It's supposed to be "Me too"

"I don't like him" "I don't either" is correct, i pulled that one from goggle though.

"Either" isn't used in positive agreement, only in negative one and as i'm aware of relatively rarely. I guess it's a 'if it sounds right we'll allow it' case.

Also the most common use for either is in 'or' sentences, example: "You either like tits, or ass"

Don't get discouraged by my critique though. I like your game so far, and i didn't even get to the h-scenes, which look very nice in the previews i must say.

To wrap up i'll give a short positive review: Good UI, interesting story, good character design, good environments and everything gameplay wise works well.

 

-note: not my drawing

Oh i found another critique worthy point, you can start repeatable h-scenes before you progress the girl's main story to that point. For example, Mina's morning Yoga events can be progressed to 'oral' and maybe further before developing the relationship to the point where that'd be ok/normal.

It's an easy fix though i think, and it's ok if you don't fix it until the end of development. Probably best if you put off fixing it until all events are in the game.

Oh yeah and a gallery for the unique h-events would be nice. I can just make a ton of saves so it's ok. Idk anything about how you'd make a gallery, so i can't give any opinion on that front. But yeah it's ok if you never make one, so don't feel pressured.

Thank you) English is not my native language, so it's really a problem. To be honest, in the first versions (i.e. initial quests) I didn't pay much attention to the script and in many moments writing is just terrible (some dialogs will be fixed in the next versions). But since version 0.5 I began to put a little more afford to dialogs between characters (although perhaps the level is still far from ideal).
I can only assure you that I try to make dialogs in new updates as good as possible and improve the existing ones if there is such a possibility.

The gallery will be open when you have access to MC's pc in his room.

I was still early in the game when i wrote that. I see there's a lot of improvement over the progression of the story.