Initial impressions:
Great detail on locations and what is happening
limited options, so replaying from start would be quick, but not a lot of paths to follow.
Didn't notice the save option until I got stuck on a page, after selecting the option to use the mind reading item, which I didn't have. :)
It just says 'Sorry, you do not have this item. Please go back to the previous passage and choose your option again.'
I couldn't see how you go back and choose another option.
I also feel like this is pointless, so if you don't have an item the option shouldn't appear.
Hope that helps :)