Apologies for the comparison. I think there was confusion when I said: "given that, well, this is quite honestly only a few steps removed from the plot of Breedtown 2. It's a stretch, but not an illogical one." I was referring to the goofy scenario you described, not your game. The story has actual depth to it that Breedtown and Breedtown 2 (especially) often fails to meet in favor of quantity. Hmm, it's almost as though the industry as a whole faces this issue, for one reason or another.
As a first-time author, I completely understand being offended by the implication, though. Setting a standard for yourself and watching someone try and pull you from it is one of the worst kinds of feelings as a content creator. Sometimes it's helpful, most of the time it's people attempting to project their favorite qualities onto the nearest, most accessible source of that entertainment. In this industry? I imagine it's even worse.
I checked out Hazumi and Pregnation, and for reasons I've already described it just isn't my cup of tea. It just crosses that line for me. On r95, there are some other better options, though. So I appreciate the pointer.
I would still like to extend an offer to proofread your dialogue. Regardless of fetishes or lackthereof, I just enjoy proofreading and teaching people smaller nuances of writing where applicable. Maybe you're good enough that I don't really have many pointers; either way, a second perspective is valuable. Please consider it.