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Hello I just wanted to give a quick criticism here.  As I had said in my reply above, I'm grateful you and the dev clarified that this is a story based novel, not a porn game. However with that decision made, this is one piece of writing I definitely think the dev could improve on. It’s important to note that while in fiction when sexual acts are performed with characters, the immediate time after the acts are performed are crucial for character development, as this is typically the time when two people are at their most vulnerable. The dev clearly understands this and capitalizes on it, however I found that here is where he suffers slight indecisiveness. He wants to create an erotic aura with the woman; they perform sexual acts, realize what they've done, immediately deny them and create further sexual tension which can be exploited further for an even greater and more satisfying reward. Very smart as a writer, however(and this is very nit-picky), you have to be careful what characters you do that to, as it doesn't make sense with some personality wise and doing it too frequently can take away some of the sexual tension.