Ok just to be sure I have DL e-1. And I think you need to get someone to go Line By Line in the First 20-40
scenes, i say that because when your first shown Venus and her sister , well One is She the Other is He. then the Boy Shown is She. then the Fight scene really 4 Girls Fighting when there all Boys? As for the scene In the Office of the Corporation, I do not know if you are trying to be funny or your Insane. No i'm not Joking. I was so many errors that i had to save and read a book.
PLEASE Have someone that is a Native English Speaker go thru and Cheek for Spelling & Grammatical Errors.
as of this date and time I have yet checked E-2part 1. I will check after I have finished E-1. I loves the VN/Game before the Remake. I hope i can Like, Love the Remake!
Sadly you might want to Have e-2 P-1 Checked also. I'm where Tomas gives the Book and there are Many errors, Manly She/He being switched around. Still Good short of that.