First I'd like to say that this is such nice work!
However I do have some thoughts... I don't know if it's a translation thing or not, but there are some misspellings and a few lines of text that are phrased a little weird to me. Like "scrapped" used in place of "scraped" for example... Other things like Ronette not being in a proper hospital bed stood out to me. Also, I hope the full game doesn't touch the Black Lodge segments quite so soon...
Besides that, I think this is an amazing project and I can't wait to see more.