Well i just finished 100 percent. Interesting to say the least and a lot of fun so lets do a compliment sandwich!
Good things first, I really enjoy games that make you feel like you have a choice in the matter when you don't. This game does that very well!
Middle parts are things I didn't like. You say that you went through and did proofreading and I think you'll need to go through and do it again. I was very confused when day 9 started in spanish, too.
And to end on a good note! This game was very hot! Like you have the right amount of build up to H scenes and even then the H scenes are animated properly and look really nice! Even the scenes for the Queens game are done really well.
So all in all I really f****ing enjoyed this! 9 outta 10!