Copying this over from the game jam page too. Great work, Vanilla!
A very fun story of what I hope is a taste of what's to come!
Story: Was initially leaning for 3 stars as it does end a bit abruptly, but then I realized I really want more! 4 stars it is for this category! The story we do have is fun, if a bit stiff with the writing itself. It is very tight and well paced, though. I enjoy the two leads we got, with Xavier serving as an excellent MC/POV for the reader and Daniel a fun, overprotective best friend. If ya continue on with this I'm sure we'll get some more meat to sink our teeth into! And damn that twist was AWESOME! Definitely looking forward to more (if ya make more, which ya should. The VN scene needs more of this genre)
Presentation: 4 stars. I really liked the filters you had going on with the backgrounds, both the coloring for the outside areas and the pencil sketch style. Provided a unique backdrop and a nice vibe that meshed will with how the story ended up. I especially liked the contrast that developed from the coloring of the home and the outdoors area. Not sure if it was intentional or not, but it kind of lends a feeling of "stepping into the unknown" for Xavier. Love it.
Creativity: 5 stars, and I don't wanna go into why too much cause it'll spoil the twist. LOVE IT!