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Played this at 4 in the morning, which I believe was quite possibly the best time to play this game. I really liked it. The dirty, grimy aesthetic, the depictions of gore, the offputting apathy of everyone around, and the mystery of it all tie together perfectly. I did notice a few grammatical errors (like, one or two), but they could be solved in a few seconds. 

I would recommend changing the pronoun function. Being able to type your own name works because the spelling is never changed unless you're using a possessive (in which case, you can add 's after the command). This doesn't work with pronouns because of the different derivatives (for example, when you input a singular pronoun, the game later says "they/she/he going to run away," when it should say "he/she is going to run away," or, "they're going to run away." 

Because you can only add one pronoun, all the derivatives are lost, leading to odd sentence structures like the example above. I don't know much about code, but if you want your players to be able to choose their pronouns, you could implement something similar to what the pronoun dressing room does, where you manually input your full set of pronouns and then choose whether it's singular or plural. 

You can also avoid pronouns altogether by replacing them with the player's name, which would be far easier.

Sorry if this comment isn't totally coherent (I have lost the ability to tell), it is currently 5 in the morning, and I think I am about to die. No regrets though I had a lot of fun playing

I also think that playing this novel at night or in the morning is the best time! In fact, in the full version I'll remove the pronoun system altogether, as it turns out they are not useful at all, haha! Again, I'm sorry for the grammatical errors, I really have no idea how to fix them... 

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Oh, no worries! Really, they're not that bad. Something I've seen some creators do is write all the dialogue in a Google Doc or Word before adding it to the script, since those programs can help you check for errors. But, grammar mistakes or not, you've still created an amazing, horrifying work of art. A few odd sentences isn't going to change that. Good luck with the rest of development!