This is fascinating. I particularly appreciate the switch of point of view as we explore the different characters (maybe something learned by reading DU Bois' The Comet? :) The story wraps up well, and although there is surely more to say and do in this world, the looping structure gives it depth. Now, what this needs is more visual design: Lets take a break during class to help you solve the image issue, the error with the alignment macro, and remove the "back" arrow. Also, if you return to this, definitely consider more art and better styling. My two cents