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The story and art is amazing, although I've seen a lot of, I guess, not contracted wording? I don't really know how to explain it but I see a lot of "I am" instead of "I'm" and other stuff like that in places where the latter would maybe make the script more fluid, like "I am glad I happened to be nearby" instead of "I'm glad I happened to be nearby"

I hope this doesn't come off as just criticizing, but as constructive criticism instead

(most sentences work well without contracted wording, but in the rest It'd work better with them)

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other than this stuff the script is really well written