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Yay a visual novel! Great job on a storyline with many classic tropes-- even if I could predict where things were going because of them, it was still fun to see how you chose to pull them off or add a twist! Like other people, it took me a bit to realize that the player is Lily but once that was cleared up I was mostly swept up in the story and it didn't bother me, personally. I do think that the sprite choice to make Mother and Spring have red eyes when they were being suspicious made the overall tone way more sinister than it actually ended up being haha

Also really appreciated the ability to immediately go back to the last choice that led to the non-true endings and to change my decisions!

Just a little thing-- I think for Buddy Up Jam there's a thing about making sure you have the legal right to use certain assets. While I don't think that the ai bg are as obvious of a problem, the main menu song is definitely copyrighted regardless of who's performance it is T.T (I would just be careful about keeping that song in as is if you plan to develop this game further!)

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Thank you for reading TLS and giving feedback TwoFish!

I'm really greatful for your constructive critisism and suggestions, I will make sure to apply the necessary changes to make this a better VN.

I'm glad you enjoyed certain aspects of the novel, your feedback will be taken into consideration and applied. Seeing as I'm still fairly new to the vn stuff I wasn't aware of copyrights and so on (I had gone solo on all of this :) ) thanks a bunch for letting me know, I will also make sure to change that!

Thank you so much <3